tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-816513164777678855.post3892626022483376630..comments2012-10-23T09:54:19.890-07:00Comments on In The Slammer With Grammar: It's A Beautiful DayKellen Middletonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08392215755687031673noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-816513164777678855.post-65920706766127918162012-10-07T18:49:41.561-07:002012-10-07T18:49:41.561-07:00I'm glad G is there with you; life is truly wo...I'm glad G is there with you; life is truly wonderful!<br /><br />I can see you did marvelous with all the brushstrokes. You even mastered using the colon for the appositives! Yay!<br /><br />I really liked the imagery in "two steel arms slowly ticking" and especially with the picture of the wheelchair dancers being described. I've never seen a picture like that before, but perhaps I'll check it out.<br /><br />I also like how you punctuated this sentence, "It is a rather melancholic site if I have ever seen one--but not today" It really gives the right amount of emphasize to "but not today".<br /><br />You did an excellent job on today's blog! Keep up the good work and I'm sure you will one day be free!Rebecca Schmiemanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03357370279996902192noreply@blogger.com